Thursday, January 27, 2011

Sometimes My Heart Feels

This is a poem I wrote when I was in Writers' Club.
This was when I was in 3rd grade.
The poem's title is called Sometimes my Heart feels.
At the time I wrote this, I recall that we were learning how to write a 'killer last line'.
So as you can notice, at first there is a pattern of how I wrote this, but later at the last line that changed and I wrote what I could to get close to that killer last line.
Please tell me what you think of this poem through comments!

Sometimes my heart feels like a kid groaning because of


too much homework.


Sometimes my heart feels like a balloon popping in the


park.

 
Sometimes my heart feels like a hummingbird

 
twitting from flower to flower.

 
Sometimes my heart feels like a pencil breaking.

 
Sometimes my heart feels like a present waiting to be

 
opened.

 
Sometimes my heart feels like a hamster scampering in

 
circles.

 
Sometimes my heart feels like autumn leaves swirling in the

 
sky.

 
Sometimes my heart feels like a pancake flipping in the air.

 
Sometimes my heart feels like a rose blooming in spring.

 
My heart has been thoughtful all of these

but it always is the lake reflecting the rainbow.


1 comment:

  1. Jisue,
    I like your introduction.
    As you might know, this is my favorite among your poems although it is sort of old. But here I feel something awkward about format.
    You can make this looking better by changing font size and line spacing. Also probably highligh the killer last line.

    Cheers,

    Dad

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